tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post1013571608792319880..comments2024-03-05T08:39:54.448-08:00Comments on The New Flesh: The New Fleshhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03452439320348802186noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-46582443323618271942009-12-22T19:10:57.895-08:002009-12-22T19:10:57.895-08:00Thanks so much everyone for your encouraging comme...Thanks so much everyone for your encouraging comments! Dana, my husband agrees with you. I think I've learned my lesson on jargon :)Cascade Lilyhttp://tensecondsaday.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-48650923053535935132009-12-14T03:10:07.956-08:002009-12-14T03:10:07.956-08:00Nice story telling! I'm wondering what he has...Nice story telling! I'm wondering what he has to explain...?Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-7519620590888586342009-12-13T17:31:27.420-08:002009-12-13T17:31:27.420-08:00What a world you paint. Fantastical... more? Peace...What a world you paint. Fantastical... more? Peace, LindaLindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-2087852368042381952009-12-13T09:35:04.542-08:002009-12-13T09:35:04.542-08:00This was really good, Lily. Enough of a hook to m...This was really good, Lily. Enough of a hook to make us want more.<br /><br />My small gripe is that I don't like excessive jargon. "It was told that three dicensia had passed since he’d seen another of his kind. " I find it jarring and get knocked out of the story ("What's dicensia? Is that a real word I don't know? What does it translate as? A century, a millenium?", etc.).<br /><br />Which is not to say I didn't enjoy the story!Danahttp://pixelenvy.ca/cgi/fff.cginoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-2569842307522593312009-12-13T07:17:06.699-08:002009-12-13T07:17:06.699-08:00And then what happens? she asked excitedly, jumpi...And then what happens? she asked excitedly, jumping up and down and wanting to know more. Lily, I really enjoyed this. You created such a compelling world that I want to know more and more, but of course the mystery of it is wonderful, too. Thanks for sharing! ~OliviaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-28130558286517176022009-12-13T05:36:23.698-08:002009-12-13T05:36:23.698-08:00Wow! For a first fantasy outing this was amazing. ...Wow! For a first fantasy outing this was amazing. Everyone has said what I want to - ditto! I have so many questions about this world you have created. It would make a wonderful series or novel - but that is my wish, because I want to hear more.<br />Great story!Anne Tyler Lordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16909141266966569378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-71423352112421309442009-12-12T14:03:12.926-08:002009-12-12T14:03:12.926-08:00Well done on placing this and creating such an int...Well done on placing this and creating such an intriguing world. Cool to be reading a #fridayflash out in the wild.dan powellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14131553102349479513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-23404309121530828272009-12-11T15:33:51.339-08:002009-12-11T15:33:51.339-08:00Great to see you here Lily. Nice foray into fantas...Great to see you here Lily. Nice foray into fantasy. It shows your talent exceeds your previous boundaries.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-88205418897325257122009-12-11T14:15:16.127-08:002009-12-11T14:15:16.127-08:00I hate to be a repeat, but I loved this 'world...I hate to be a repeat, but I loved this 'world' as well. So visual, and what a tease you are to leave it off as you did! I like the visual of this and the way you left it at short choppy sentences for good effect.<br /><br />"It was pure, it was crystal. It was home."<br /><br />Good job, Lily!Jodi MacArthurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13373591664178281529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-49128815727195779622009-12-11T08:59:57.006-08:002009-12-11T08:59:57.006-08:00Very cool story. You did a great job with the desc...Very cool story. You did a great job with the descriptions. This world you've created is very intriguing.Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-82171530820758446522009-12-11T05:07:54.976-08:002009-12-11T05:07:54.976-08:00This fantasy story is Fantastical!
It intrigues a...This fantasy story is Fantastical!<br /><br />It intrigues and each sentence leaves one wanting to read more.<br /><br />I particularly liked the lines where Arual sight leads her to realize that her world was crystal, pure and home.<br /><br />Lily, it's wonderful!Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-76062483738136022402009-12-11T04:17:00.452-08:002009-12-11T04:17:00.452-08:00Thanks for the read and the comments guys! My firs...Thanks for the read and the comments guys! My first fantasy outing. I enjoyed it!Lily Mulhollandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09804113718224654006noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-13213467467318492222009-12-11T04:15:02.611-08:002009-12-11T04:15:02.611-08:00That last line is great! Very intriguing world. It...That last line is great! Very intriguing world. It leaves me wanting so much more, like what is the secret of the blue pearl? Wonderful, Lily!Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-36368318145838126392009-12-11T03:36:32.877-08:002009-12-11T03:36:32.877-08:00I too liked the line about the colours screaming i...I too liked the line about the colours screaming in unison. This is an intriguing world and the story leaves just enough questions open. Well done.Lauritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03688820247531607677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-64092712660970277622009-12-11T02:37:07.263-08:002009-12-11T02:37:07.263-08:00Like Mazzz, I enjoyed the world you created here. ...Like Mazzz, I enjoyed the world you created here. I particularly liked the line: "The remnant eyes of the Aonegians were white and unseeing." ~ that's vividly haunting and will stay with me.David Mastershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12809185582216906363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8182211402974703144.post-79545619730832946062009-12-11T02:25:34.548-08:002009-12-11T02:25:34.548-08:00Great world here!
Arual is a very string character...Great world here!<br />Arual is a very string character<br />Loved the colours screaming in unison!mazzz_in_Leedshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01498100483681096442noreply@blogger.com